B.
Positive
In the World Health Organization or WHO remarks about the coronavirus 19, the organization is one of the properties of well-written text present in this statement. The paragraphs were well organized and logically arranged. Furthermore, it contains the topic of Coronavirus 19 or known as a covid-19, and was focused on the subject. In addition, most of the phrases were concise and vividly explained. The importance of features of the organized text was applied in the announcement, such as focus, adequate development, and unity. From the beginning until the end, the main center of the statement discussed was all about the matter targeted by the Directors-General of the World Health Organization. As stated in the text in the beginning, “Every day, COVID-19 seems to reach a new and tragic milestone.” In the supporting sentences, it is stated that “Every day, we are learning more about this virus and the disease it causes. One of the things we are learning is that although older people are the hardest hit, younger people are not spared.” Additionally, “During this difficult time, it’s important to continue looking after your physical and mental health. This will not only help you in the long-term, it will also help you fight COVID-19 if you get it,” is written in the text. It was constant that until the end of the statement was about the same issue. As reported by the Directors-general, “COVID-19 is taking so much from us. But it’s also giving us something special-the opportunity to come together as one humanity- to work together, to learn together, to grow together.” In addition to the focus, this text has transitional words or signal devices for the sentence to be more organized. In addition, be more intelligible for the readers. As mentioned by the WHO generals-director, “First, eat a health and nutritious diet, which helps your immune system to function properly. Second, limit your alcohol consumption and avoid sugary drinks.” With the help of these transition words, the flow of the sentences was smooth. Lastly, the statement has cohesion, in which capitalizations and punctuations are used properly.
Negative
Despite the fact that most of the text was organized, a few paragraphs in the statement are not accurately used, such as there are some phrases that words were used frequently. I suggest using synonyms to improve the quality of the work and reduce repetitions. Furthermore, in some phrases, the proper parallel structure was not applied. It was mentioned in the text, “As you know, the collapse of the market for personal protective equipment has created extreme difficulties in ensuring health workers have access to the equipment they need to do their jobs safely and effectively.” In my opinion, using the proper parallel construction to balance the sentence and enhance the work.
C.
Positive
In the opening remarks of the World Health Organization’s General-director, use proper words. Most of the expressions used in his statement fit the need of its reader. Few phrases were formal, and some were not, like the phrase, “Today, I have a message for young people: you are not invincible. This virus could put you in hospital for weeks, or even kill you,” is formal for using “I have” instead of making it short like “I’ve.” In addition, in his closing speech, his way of being thankful is too formal. As he stated, “I thank you.” In addition to having a formal structure, WHO’s director uses concrete and concise words in his remarks.
According to him, “Data from many countries clearly show that people under 50 make up a significant proportion of patients requiring hospitalization.” He specified that the adults aged below fifty are the ones in need of care and treatment.
Negative
A few downsides included in the statement are the use of technical language or jargon. The main subject of the statement was the regard of the COVID-19, which everyone should have knowledge of. With the use of unfamiliar words, the audience might cause confusion and would not be able to appreciate the message of the statement. In my opinion, they should have used straightforward expressions or words since not everyone has the same vocabulary levels. Especially the topic is for every age some children would find it difficult to understand if the phrase is professional instead of simple. In the middle of the statement, one of the words used is “inevitable,” which is not one of the basic terminologies. In addition, the one mentioned of both using formal and informal structure. In my opinion, he, the WHO’s director, should have used neither formal nor informal rather than using both. Lastly, the use of slang and abbreviations. Most of the phrases have the word “WHO,” which stands for “World Health Organization.” I found this negative since people might get confused if it is only the abbreviation.